SAT写作学生原作与老师修改文章示例_SAT写作

SAT写作学生原作与老师修改文章示例

　　下面是一位同学在练习SAT写作时的一篇文章，第二页是老师对其进行的修改，用粗体标出，大家可以对照他的原文和修改后的文章，看看自己是不是也会犯这样的错误，引以为鉴。

　　学生原文：

　　Assignment: Is talking the most effective and satisfying way of communicating with others?

　　Talking, which is the most used communication device in life, seems to be genuine and personal. However, talking is also a device full of rhetoric, which makes things complicated. On the other hand, some other communications are much more effective and satisfying than what we perceive.

　　Singing is sometimes referred to the poems with voices and rhythm, and it helps us to give out all kinds of emotion through every single patch of our voice, accentuation, and things like that. Take Susan Boyle as an example. She was diagnosed to have difficulty in learning when she was born. And her studying life did bring her a lot chiding and mocking, and so she was called Simple Sussy. And shes not good at talking appropriately and formally; as a result, she tool a job in kitchen after graduation from high school. However, she always nudged others disapproval of her away and keeps chasing her dream- to be a singer. The moment she stood on the stage of Britains Got Talent, no one thought this old Scottish granny could shock the world, but Susans I Dreamed a Dream even moved the tip-ticking judge Simon and become another American Dream. If Susan had not kept polishing her singing skills, she would live a boring life in the country, with poor talking talents.