Plain: Jackie Chan was such a wonderful singer that his songs held eleven thousand people breathless.

　　Interesting: Jackie Chans songs held eleven thousand people breathless.

　　Weak: Many people in Shanghai used to live in attics, so they could see only a blank wall surrounding them.

　　Better: Many people in Shanghai used to live in attics, their only vista a blank wall.

　　Plain: It was such an exhilarating experience that he felt dazed the whole evening, well after the concert.

　　Interesting: It was an exhilarating experience, one that left him dazed the whole evening, well after the concert.

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　　Plain: In order to advance his or her career, a genius needs strong financial support.

　　Interesting: All geniuses need a millionaire to further their careers.

　　Plain: During rush hours in Hanoi, cars often scoot into bike lanes in order to get ahead of the traffic jams. This forces bikers to hug the curbs.

　　Interesting: During rush hours in Hanoi, cars often scoot into bike lanes to cut through traffic jams, forcing bikers to hug the curbs.

　　Plain: In order to prepare for millions of visitors for millennium celebrations, the city has launched many projects, some ambitious, some modest, to beautify and modernize itself.

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