gre issue 官方范文(一)_GRE写作

gre issue 官方范文(一)

　　Also, the reasoning is not developed as fully as it would be in a response at the score level of 6 or 5.

　　While organization is adequate, the response lacks the organized coherence of ideas that exemplify a 5 essay.

　　Transitions, within and between paragraphs, are not always smooth or logical.

　　The last paragraph could be much more clearly focused, i.e., several sentences repeat the same idea -- that it is our choice whether or not we use technology -- and the purpose or meaning of others is not immediately clear.

　　In general, ideas are presented clearly, although awkward phrasing sometimes contributes to vagueness .

　　Lack of sentence structure variety seems to inhibit the communication of ideas .

　　Overall, this is an adequate response to the topic.

　　The technological tools we as a society have developed are not in themselves positive or negative, they are just that, tools.

　　The uses, however, are definitely a different story. Computers, I believe at one time, were developed to save us time.

　　Do our work more quickly for us so that we could have more leisure time to spend doing those things we enjoy.

　　We have found now, especially those of us that are parents, that all of the leisure time we have gained is either spent watching our children learn things on the computer or creating our own unique something on the family computer.