gre issue 官方范文(一)_GRE写作

gre issue 官方范文(一)

　　The conclusion, one sentence long, simply restates the claim made in the topic.

　　The awkward sentences are evidence of a limited fluency.

　　Greater use of compound sentences could help eliminate structural problems and facilitate the communication of ideas .

　　For all of these reasons, the essay received a score of 3.

　　2、Computers of all shapes and sizes, p.c.s, laptops, faxes, phones,the list never ends.

　　All considered by our society as great technological advances. Not many would argue that the development of these tools has not advanced our world in some ways. However they certainly seem to be making our world one in which contact with our fellow man is less and less necessary. Though some may be more comfortable not having to engage in direct contact, it is questionable whether this is beneficial to society as a whole. The very least result could in fact be a very lonely world, but it may result in more significant problems.

　　评价

　　This response is seriously flawed.

　　The analysis of the issue is extremely limited, and there are serious problems in sentence structure.

　　The writers position, never clearly stated, seems to be that as a result of technological developments, contact with our fellow man is less and less necessary.