Revised: Withholding even the most meager scrap of information hurts people, because however small it is, it will eventually have an impact on them.
Original: Complete information could help us to judge the environment in which we are and change our action according to others action, then the market gets to its balance.
Revised: A perfect flow of information helps us to evaluate the world in which we live, and temper our actions when we compare them to the actions of those around us.
Original: Though we are not discussing the market only, the importance of opening the information to the public also can be recognized from this.
Revised: It is a comment on society as well as markets, as it shows the value of opening up information to the public.
Original: There still has a question about the reputation about the government.
Revised: There is a still a question mark hanging over the reputation of the government.
Original: It must be noxious to people, to government, then to the whole society in long term.
Revised: But in the long-term this approach works to the detriment of society.
Original: Laws are the fundamentals of our society.
Revised: Laws are the fundamental backbone of society.
Original: All the rights such as freedom, democracy, and independence and so on we now hold can only be protected by the laws.
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