Original: Therefore, seen from the upper analysis, only both of the two assumptions are true that the significant decline of electricity consumption by the copper-extraction industry could be expected.
Revised: From the analysis above, we can see that only when both assumptions are true can a significant decline in electricity consumption be expected.
Original: Thus we come to it: individual well-being should always be confined within the overall success of a society in that the prosperity of a society promises everyone of the citizens a better premise and equal opportunity for personal success.
Revised: Therefore, individual well-being should always be viewed within the confines of a societys well-being because a prosperous society offers its citizen a better life and more opportunities to be an individual success.
Original: Modern people receive vast news and information of many kinds every day and are so overwhelmed by these factual news that they are not think much about larger issues or from overall perspectives.
Revised: Modern people are therefore overwhelmed with small pieces of factual information to the extent that they think little about the larger issues and fail to look at issues from an overall perspective.
Original: With the help of modern technologies, researchers get new findings and facts in all kinds of fields everyday, and through these facts and information most subjects and disciplines have gotten more and more specialized.
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