Revised: Modern technologys facilitation of discoveries of little bits of information in many fields also contributes to the problem of obscuring the larger perspective.
Original: In addition, in peoples daily life, they have accustomed to being surrounded by news and information disseminated through global mass media.
Revised: The dissemination of information through the global mass media, especially through television, likewise habituates people to getting information in small bites and not thinking about the bigger picture.
Original: For example, during the World War II, the American government carries out the famous Manhattan plan to develop the nuke.
For example, during World War II, the American government carried out the infamous Manhattan Project to develop the nuclear bomb.
Original: If the Manhattan would successfully develop the nuke, the battle effectiveness of the Americans military should be reinforce and take the advantages in the World War II.
If the Manhattan Project could successfully develop nuclear weapons, Americas military effectiveness could be reinforced and take on a strong advantage in the war effort.
Original: But sometimes the result of a research can cause much controversy in society.
Revised: But sometimes the result of research can stir up social controversy.
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