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On the other hand, the history of mankind has amply demonstrated that, science based on experiments and analysis, provide people with reasoned methods to conduct life. Psychology explains human behavior. Sociology enlightens people on their relationship with their surrounding environment. Modern medicine has advanced so much that it is now possible to predict cancer even before a child is born.
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Generally speaking, the so-called nonmainstream areas color our life to a GREat extent, but we should believe in the mainstream science when we want to resolve problems. Mainstream areas color our lives to a GREat extent, but we should put our trust in mainstream science when we want to solve real problems.
总评这篇GRE考试作文所犯的错误非常有代表性,提出的观点几乎完全没有例证。这是中国学生最大的通病。许多学生似乎觉得如果观点是公认的,就不需要例证了。但是现在是在考写作能力,其中最重要的一条就是能否用恰当地例证支持观点。至于观点是否新颖还是其次的考量。
第二个错误,也是非常普遍的错误就是没有表现出对问题的复杂性的理解。有老师把这一点说成是表达复杂思想的能力。这样说不准确。GRE写作不要求表达复杂的思想,而是表现出洞悉议题的复杂性的能力。GRE作文的题目往往不是黑白分明的,你可以有自己的观点,多么强烈都可以,但是从第一段起,就要注意展现对问题复杂性的认识。具体说,就是认识到你反驳或不同意的观点往往也有它的道理。 Do harm to改为harm,因为这样说更直接。英语里有 does more harm than good, did little harm这样的表达法,但是对有害应该直接用 harm, 或者be harmful to, be detrimental to.
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