Next, the author assumes that the only relevant difference between Bayview and Acorn is the wearing of school uniforms. This assumption is not supported in the argument. Moreover, if it turns out that Acorns students are gifted and highly motivated to learn whereas Bayviews are unexceptional and lack motivation to learn, common sense indicates that Acorns students would be more likely to perform better and cause fewer problems than Bayviews.
Finally, it is unclear whether Bayview suffers from any of the problems the author wishes to correct by mandating its students to wear uniforms. For example, the author states that Acorns students earn higher grades on average and are more likely to go on to college, but it is unclear whether this is a comparison to Bayviews students or to some other group. Lacking assurance that Bayview is deficient in the categories mentioned in the letter, it is difficult to accept the authors recommendation.
In conclusion, the author has failed to provide compelling reasons for the recommendation that Bayviews students be required to wear uniforms. To strengthen the argument the author would have to provide evidence for the assumption that Acorns requirement that students wear uniform is responsible for the various benefits mentioned. Additionally, it would have to be established that Bayview is similar in relevant respects to Acorn and suffers from the problems that the authors remedy is intended to correct.
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