中间段3
Finally one must understand that not all work environments can be made safer. For example, in the case of coal mining, a company only has limited ways of making the work environment safe. While companies may be able to ensure some safety precautions, they may not be able to provide all the safety measures necessary. In other words, a mining company has limited ability to control the air quality within a coal mine and therefore it cannot control the risk of employees getting blacklung. In other words, regardless of the intent of the company, some jobs are simply dangerous in nature.
末段
In conclusion, while at first it may seem to make financial sense to improve the safety of the work environment sometimes it truly does not make financial sense. Furthermore, financial sense may not be the only issue a company faces. Other types of analyses must be made such as the social ramifications of an unsafe work environment and the overall ability of a company to improve that environment . Before any decision is made, all this things must be considered, not simply the reduction of payroll expenses.
这篇官方钦定满分的范文,其最明显的优点在于:
1、字数高达599words, 充分体现了字数为王的判分倾向。
2、标准的五段制,首段、末端,中间三段,看上去很美。
3、没有陈词滥调、满篇废话的模板式语言。
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