Anther example is about a theft that took place in ancient China. A man, who lost his ax, believed his neighbor took it although he had no proof. When he met his neighbor in town the next morning, he observed him carefully and what he saw strengthened his suspicion. A week later, the ax was found by the owners son. He then went to see his neighbor and all he saw was an innocent person with no trace of stealth. He realized his unfounded suspicion had deceived his own eyes. This story tells us that what we see is determined by what we think. Therefore, truth is often not objective.
本段评点:
这个例子比第一个例子更合适一些,说明了人们主观的认识会影响对客观事实的看法,导致看到的事实都失去了其客观性。另外,本段对于故事的叙述比较清楚而且简要,抓住了找到斧子前和找到斧子后发生的变化这个重点。
第四段
The two examples led us to a conclusion that truth is not objective, but rather is determined by each individual, and this is my position towards this issue.
语言修改:
The two examples above demonstrate that truth is not objective but rather is determined by the individual.
本段评点:
结尾段比较简洁,明确。没有单纯的重复开头段,而是把结论建立在两个例子上,使读者觉得论述有根有据。
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