SAT写作真题批改实例讲解_SAT写作

SAT写作真题批改实例讲解

　　Soon Rosa was arrested by two patrolmen and was later charged with a violation of Chapter 6, Section 11 segregation law of the Montgomery City code

　　第三步：挑战权威之后带来的benefits。

　　This news spread through the black community. 1People felt it was the time for them to do something. After a conversation with several ministers and civic leaders, the group decided to organize a boycott. On the next Monday, the boycott succeeded----no black people took buses in Montgomery, which 2made they decide to continue the action. 3People formed an organization call MIA, and elect Martin Luther King as their president.

　　问题：1 这句话太空了，而且和前文的逻辑关系也不是很清楚，建议加上Rosa的举动鼓励大家团结起来争取利益。

　　2 应该改成make them decide to不过值得一提的是make 这个单词实在是比较土了，建议换成enable sb. to do. sth./或是render sb. adj 这两个概念。

　　3 继续行动，和建立组织之间严格说来还有一个小步骤，也就是为了让行动更有效果，建立了

　　修改：

　　The imprisonment of Rosa Park discouraged and infuriated the black, who had been swallowing their anger before this incident. This time they were stimulated to rebel, rescuing the brave woman Rosa Park and more importantly wining their equal rights as an American citizen. Their plan of challenging the white（点题,引出如何进一步挑战） began with a conference composed of several ministers and civic leaders, who decided to organize a boycott among the black, namely, refusing to ride the citys buses until they were treated with the level of courtesy they expected, until black drivers were hired, and until seating in the middle of the bus was handled on a first-come basis. Moreover, in order to win the battle more effectively, the black formed an organization call MIA and elected Martin Luther King as their president. Their protest lasted over a year, ending when the United States Supreme Court ordered Montgomery to abolish the bus law. （这是挑战之后的成果，废除了公交法）