SAT写作真题批改实例讲解_SAT写作

SAT写作真题批改实例讲解

　　第四步：例子论述结束，进行议论，把观点和例子结合起来。

　　If those black people had never fought for their rights, they would still sit 1on the back of the bus, and 2they had to give up their seats whenever white people ask. 3If they had not challenged the white people, who are authority to them, they might still live at the bottom of society.

　　问题：这个议论写得还是比较精彩的，用的是虚拟语气，从句和过去相反，主句和现在相反。

　　1 处有问题，坐在汽车后部？ Take a seat in the back of the bus.

　　2 处的they had to 和之前的they would sit 并不是完全对等，我们可以改成： They would have to take a seat in the back of the bus and give up their seats when the white section was full. 其次if 如果做虚拟，可以做结构省略，had those black people never fought for

　　3 生活在社会底层这个表达还是略有点中式。

　　Had they never challenged their authority, the white, they might still live at the foot of the social ladder.

　　4 还有一个小问题就是在不写结尾段的情况下，建议在议论部分明确的把你的观点再重申一下。

　　修改：

　　Had Rosa Park never refused to give up her seat（概括例子）, the black would still have to take a seat in the back of the bus and give up their seats when the white section was full. Had Rosa Park never challenged the authority for equal rights, the black might still live at the foot of the social ladder.