本段评点
与上一段虚构的小说人物相对应,这里作者举出了自己身边人的真实的例子,既恰当贴切,又很有说服力。不过,本段的句式比较单调,大部分是以she开头的单句。
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Have you heard of a story named Beauty and the Beast? The beast seems unacceptable in appearance, right? But finally he wins the heart of the princess for his bravery to show love. The quality drives him to the success, not the style.
Have you heard of a story named Beauty and the Beast? The beast seems unacceptable in appearance, right? But t finally he wins the heart of the princess for his bravery to show love. His qualities, not his style, lead to his success.
本段评点
本段又举出了一个生动的例子,即《美女和野兽》这个童话故事。与前面两个例子相比,这个例子叙述的比较简略,这样的设计很好,使得各个例子详略得当,不千篇一律。不过,需要注意的是这里的两个问句显得有些突兀,而且连续问两个问题,也显得太多了。
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