2 呵呵,在这位同学的营造下,他的朋友成了又一个马景涛,很喜欢吼,看过实在忍俊不禁。
修改:He, holding out his hand, firstly knocked at my head, had me in his arm and told me some words that I would never forget, Cheer up. Do not cry over the split milk. Just let it go. Put aside the previous failure and try your best in the current match. He drove those words so deep into my heart that I finally made it. Finally, we won the
注:各位要学会多用对话加强真实感。
三 When we came back to Suzhou, I began to work harder on my tennis training. Everyday I went to the tennis court after school. From 5p.m. to 8p.m., I 1exert all my strength at training. Everyday I was still training 2while my teammates went home with their parents.
分析:
1 时态的问题请大家一定要注重,确保前后一致。
2 在看这句的时候,突然觉得作者有一点感伤了,看到同学们都和爸妈一起回去了。
3 总体上说训练是一个把不好的记忆变成好记忆的重要过度,还得添加笔墨来加强场景感。
修改:
After returning to my hometown, days went on as usual. But that failed experience let me realize that as a tennis player, there was still a long way before me. In order to fill the gap between professional athletes and me, I became harder on myself. Everyday after school I could be spotted walking into the stadium and training painstakingly every night until the security guard hurried me up to leave there. Day in and day out, I kept practicing a series of skills---serving, forehand hitting and backhand returning, dampening one T-shirt after another. But no matter how tired I was, I always bore in mind an idea to beat that man who looked upon me one year ago. For almost a year, the total practice hours mounted to an amazing __ hours.
【SAT作文修改实例讲解(二)】相关文章:
最新
2016-06-14
2016-06-14
2016-03-02
2016-03-02
2016-03-02
2016-03-02