The lesson of learning from others opinions of yourself extends much farther than the song of a fictional character. Two days ago, in an art class, my group of students had assigned self portraits due. Most of us brought in photographs of ourselves. Nevertheless, one boy brought nothing and handed us all slips of paper. He told us to write a word to describe him, and when we had done so, he pasted the words on a poster. This must have been a revealing exercise for him because, upon the sight of such descriptions as bitter and sarcastic, he was shocked. In the case of this boy, he had not realized how his personality appeared to others. Though he might not have thought himself bitter, his friends comments certainly made him seem that way. The fact that we need others in order to understand ourselves is clearly shown by this boys revelation.
Score Explanation SAT写作6分范文点评
This outstanding essay effectively and insightfully develops the point of view that In at least some respects, we need other people in order to understand ourselves. The writer demonstrates outstanding critical thinking by focusing on the differing examples of J. Alfred Prufrock and a peer from the writers own class to support this position. The essay first describes how, by not allowing himself to interact with women, Prufrock denies himself the approval necessary to reveal Prufrocks talents to him. Next, the writer contrasts this with the shock a classmate feels after reading how his classmates describe him. Both of these clearly appropriate examples reinforce the writers position. This essay is well organized, focusing first on the character from Eliots poem and then smoothly shifting focus to the personal example of the writers peer. The strength of organization and focus allow this essay to demonstrate a depth of development, clear coherence, and smooth progression of ideas. The essay exhibits skillful use of language and demonstrates meaningful variety in sentence structure . Demonstrating clear and consistent mastery, this essay receives the highest score of 6.
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