例:The increasing use of chemical obstacles in agriculture also makes pollution.(农业方面化学物质使用的不断增加也造成了污染。)
剖析:显然,考生把obstacles障碍,障碍物误作substance物质了。另外the increasing use (不断增加的使用) 应改为abusive use (滥用)。
改为:The abusive use of chemical substances in agriculture also causes/leads to pollution.
九、累赘(Redundancy)
言以简洁为贵。写句子没有一个多余的词,写段落没有一个无必要的句子。能用单词的不用词组,能用词组的不用从句或句子。如:
In spite of the fact that he is lazy, I like him.
本句的the fact that he is lazy系同谓语从句,我们按照上述能用词组的不用从句可以改为:In spite of his laziness, I like him.
例:For the people who are diligent and kind, money is just the thing to be used to buy the thing they need.
剖析:整个句子可以大大简化。
改为:Diligent, caring people use money only to buy what they need.
十、不连贯(Incoherence)
不连贯是指一个句子前言不对后语,或是结构上不畅通。这也是考生常犯的毛病。
例:The fresh water, it is the most important things of the earth.
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