例2
原句:
You are enthusiastic and enterprising. And you are one of the most talented and diligentin our department. You have already won 2 awards for good academic results.
改句:
You, enthusiastic and enterprising,are one of the most talented and diligent in our department,already winning 2 awards for outstanding academic results.
【解析】
我们可以看到例句中有3个简单句,咋看上去给人一种啰嗦、累赘的感觉。但细看之下,不难发现3个句子的主语全部是you,因此我们就该联想到同位语、插入语的应用。从改句中,我们可以发现谓语从原来的3个变成了1个,顿时使句子显得高级,精简很多。其次,还有一个改动之处为good,这个词是常用词,口语中用的更频繁些,我们可以想一些同义词例如excellent,outstanding等等。
例3
原句:
In order to live a good life, it is becoming more and more important for people to learnknowledge well. Because in this modern world, knowledge is everything.
改句:
In order to live a happy life, it is becoming increasingly important for people toacquire knowledge well, for the reason that knowledge is everything in this modern world.
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