You said that you would teach English in return.I very need it，so it is very good for me.

　　Look forward to your reply！

　　Li Xia [名师点评]

　　本文的词数符合要求但是由于缺少高级的表达而影响了文章的档次。

　　本文在高级词汇方面使用较少有些词汇是可以升级的。例如very可升级为more than可升级为give a helping hand可升级为to begin/start with可升级为call for等。

　　本文使用的复合句也是寥寥无几适当地使用一些复合句和非谓语动词会提升文章的档次使阅卷人愿意为

　　[尝试优化]

　　This is Li Xia.I learned from your post that you want to improve your Mandarin.I am more than glad to give a helping hand.To start with，I have been speaking Mandarin for about 17 years.And I have helped two exchange students with their Mandarin learning.So I'm confident that I will do it well.

　　As is always the case with language learning，Mandarin learning also asks for lots of practice.To practice as much as possible is where the secret lies.Besides，keeping a Mandarin diary also helps a lot.

　　You mentioned that you would like to teach English in return，which is exactly what I am dying for.I badly need to improve my oral English，so it is great for me to find a native speaker to learn from.

　　Looking forward to your reply！

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