2、但信息的描述有些模糊不清,主要是因为:缺乏恰当的过渡词,文章显得散乱,没有层次。比如:在Some students like classical music.前缺少一个转折连词。
3、用词重复,句式单一,缺少变化。比如:多次使用think表示看法。"They like / love music."是本文用来表达喜欢音乐的唯一句型。
成稿:
Dear Editor,
All of our classmates were interested in your survey "What kind of music do you like best?"
We had a heated discussion and found out we have different opinions. Most students like pop music, such as rock& roll, R&B, disco, jazz and hip-hop. Some have a deep love for hip-hop. They think that hip-hop can touch young people’s hearts. They say their favorite hip-hop singer is Jay Chou. However, a few students are fond of
classical music. In their opinion, classical music is more beautiful than pop music, and many classical works are precious cultural treasures. Personally speaking, I love all kinds of music that are beautiful, graceful, encouraging, touching and relaxing. As we all know, music is a part of our life. Music makes our world colorful.
1. 本文结构严密,是典型的"三段式"结构:第一段引出文章内容;第二段详细介绍同学们的观点;第三段概括总结。层次清楚、连贯,清楚地说出了当代中学生对音乐的想法。
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