三、学生习作

　　                                  Beauty will buy no beef    Everyone admires beauty. Nowadays some people tend to think that they own beauty if they have a good looking. They are not satisfied with their appearance. They spend much money taking a kind of operation. Can beauty really be man-made？If so， everybody can get beauty. As a result，there is no beauty at all.    The appearance is given by our parents and is unique in the world. Everyone should value it. I’d ①rather prefer nature as the standard of beauty. Just accept yourself, accept everything the god gives to you，and create the beautiful life ②belong to you.    Many heroes don’t have beautiful surface. However，their beautiful images often come to our minds. Their beauty comes from their contributions to the society.     Don’t be eager to judge whether a person is beautiful or not without a thorough understanding of him. A beautiful person is not the one with a good looking，but with a broad and kind heart.     Good looking is pleasant while spiritual beauty is more important. As an old saying goes，“Virtue is fairer than beauty.”If you have a kind heart，you own real beauty.      【点评】  本文以谚语“漂亮不能当饭吃”为题，直截了当地亮出了自己的观点。全文以“美德胜于美貌”为主线，阐述了“追求外形的美而放弃了内在的美不是真正的美”。文章观点鲜明，结构严谨，用词恰当，作者能运用谚语来强化自己的观点，有较强的英语语言组织能力和表达能力。    本文有两处语言错误：① I’d rather prefer应改为  I’d prefer。would rather表示“宁愿”，prefer也是“宁愿”的意思，两者不能连用在一起。② belong to 改为belonging to，在此处作定语。 (201*内江、广安模拟)

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