to

　　give

　　up

　　smoking，I volunteered in an activity ①organizing by our school last week whose theme was the dangers of smoking .

　　In the morning we met at the School gate，and then we went to the nearest park，②which many people were doing morning exercise．We had a discussion there，which attracted more attention．Next，we gave out brochures where there was knowledge of the dangers of smoking to people around．At the same time , more and more people came to ask some questions．③It's smoking that ruin their bright future. They have really learned a lot from this activity.

　　With the help of us ，more and more people have ④made up their mind to give up smoking．We have really learned a lot from this activity . We realized that only

　　if we try to avoid bad habits can we enjoy the true happiness of life.

　　【教师点评】

　　文章作者运用记叙性的语言描述了作为一个志愿者的亲身体经历及感受，准确把握了记叙文的六要素，运用了第一人称和一般过去时来描述事件整个，与题目的要求相吻合。同时运用了一些连接firstly，next，and then等，将事件很有条理的描述出来。从语言上看，作者具有深厚的语言功底。文中使用了高级词汇以及搭配，如：get a good command of ;

　　not only．．．but also … , do harm to，become addicted to , make up their minds，form the good habits 等等，

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