本文基本概括了提示要点,叙述清晰,前后顺序安排合理。但也有一些不足:
1.??? 结尾缺少了最后一个提示要点中的"意犹未尽"。
2.??? 文中时态混乱。3. 文中多次使用同样的修饰词happy / happily,词汇量显得贫乏。
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成稿:
Our school held an art festival at the end of the term. On Friday afternoon, our class had a party to celebrate the festival.
First we had music and dancing. My friend Mary sang a pop song. Some others danced for us. We were all very happy.
Then we had one competition after another. Before we knew it, it was five o抍lock. The most exciting program began: the cooking competition. Each group had to make some special dishes. The students had turned into cohoks, though they couldn抰 tell salt from sugar the day before.
At last we
had to finish our party. When we said goodbye to each other, we had the same feeling in our hearts: We want to have more wonderful times at school.
本文覆盖了题目要求的所有要点,结构完整,层次清晰。文章开头总的介绍学校举办艺术节。接下来从第二段开始就具体叙述作者所在的班为庆祝艺术节而举办的一次聚会,以点代面,烘托整体。写班里的聚会时,从低潮向高潮展开,先写唱歌、舞蹈,再写烹任比赛,使聚会达到高潮。最后,作者写出同学们一致的心愿:学生在紧张的学习之余,需要生动活泼的娱乐活动。本文语言流畅自然,是篇中学生不可多得的好文章。
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