2017届高考英语牛津译林版一轮写作能力提升课件：第17讲如何写开放类作文_高考复习指南

2017届高考英语牛津译林版一轮写作能力提升课件：第17讲如何写开放类作文

　　I can still remember ①a incident which hap-pened on a rainy Sunday afternoon. I was on my way to the bookstore and was ②waiting the green light at a crossing when a girl of about ten was knocked down by a passing car,which drove off quickly. A man immediately rushed to the girl to give her first aid. I also joined in without hesitation. ③Comparing with the es-caped driver, I am proud of what I did. As a member of the society, I realize that re-sponsibility plays a very important role in creat-ing a better society. 文章提升: 1.修改错误: 1)incident读音以元音音素开头,故应将①a改为。 2)wait是不及物动词,故应在②waiting后加介词。 3)compare与其逻辑主语I之间是被动关系,故将③Comparing改为。 2.提升建议: 将画线部分改为强调句型:

　　阅卷现场参考范文: During the last summer vacation I experienced many things but it was one small thing that was the most unforgettable. On a sunny Saturday, I was taking a bus to visit my uncle. So many people were there on the bus that some persons had to stand, including an old woman. On seeing this scene, I offered my seat to her without hesitation because I thought respecting the old is a virtue in traditional Chinese culture. When seeing the smile on the woman's face, I felt very proud.

　　From this small thing I came to understand that small things make a difference to the world. Only when everyone places a high value on responsibility for the society can we create a better society to live in. 答案 1.修改错误:1)an　2)for (3)Compared 2.提升建议:it's responsibility that plays a very important role in creating a better society 四、高分秀场 (2015江西高三十校第一次联考) 北大前任校长王恩哥说过:作为新时代的学生,我们应该插上两个翅膀——理想和毅力,结交两个朋友——图书馆和运动场。请就以上话题展开想象写一篇文章,阐述你对此的理解。注意:1.词数100左右; 2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。 3.参考词汇:理想 ideal;毅力perseverance