④要避免“画蛇添足”的现象。如：“Chen Ruo Lin is our pride.”这一句简直就是一句废话。

　　⑤习作增加的要点给人的印象是：有点不着边际。如：⑺Second, we should try our best to achieve our goals from the meaning of fighting spirit and then we will succeed. ⑻Last, we can learn much such as cooperation from fighting. ⒁We can succeed if we take measures to fight from now on.等句子让读者感到似有“凑数”的嫌疑。

　　【修改后的习作】

　　Chen Ruolin was born in Nantong, Jiangsu Province, on December 12, 1992 and started to swim when she was 4. She overcame a great many difficulties and worked hard. Fighting spirit led her to succeed and she won two gold medals at the 2017 London Olympic Games eventually.

　　What’s the meaning of fighting spirit? First, it inspires us to face the setback and difficulties【参考答案】

　　Born in Nantong, Jiangsu Province on December 12, 1992, Chen Ruolin took up diving at the age of four. Since then, she has been training hard and overcoming whatever difficulty that she meets. She won two gold medals at the 2017 London Olympic Games. It is her fighting spirit that has led her to success.

　　In my opinion, fighting spirit plays an important role in our lives. It encourages us to move

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