一切尽在不言中,我张开手掌,把金色的阳光小心翼翼地捧着,两手弯曲,折合成心形,对着镜子、对着自己!
All in silence, I opened my hand, holding the golden sunshine carefully, bending my hands, folding them into a heart, facing the mirror and myself!
让梦飞翔
Let dreams fly
我生活在自我小天地间,
I live in my own little world,
忧伤、自卑是我的衣裳,
Sorrow and inferiority are my clothes,
有一天,曙光照射在我的身上,
One day, the dawn fell on me,
击碎了我的忧伤,
I have broken my sorrow,
于是我张开了翅膀,
So I spread my wings,
冲出自我的牢房
Out of my cell
任由丝丝阳光
Let the sun shine
编织新的梦想
Weave a new dream
我展翅飞翔,
I fly,
与梦想同行!
Go with your dream!
——后记
Postscript
名师点评:
Comments on famous teachers:
本篇考场佳作的小作者善于创设情境,细致描绘。
The author of this paper is good at creating situations and describing them carefully.
一、我们可以把文章看作电影镜头定格的两幅画面,一幅画面色调阴暗、气氛沉闷,展现一个苦闷、彷徨、自卑的“自我”,另一幅画面则色调明丽,感情激昂,展现了一个充满活力与激情,获得新生的“自我”,对比鲜明,形象地表现了话题“走出自我小天地”。
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