With beautiful language, this paper shows the rich imagination ability of the author, and makes people enjoy the beauty. On the whole, it is novel and appropriate to symbolize the perplexity, struggle and rebirth of adolescence with the natural life phenomena of "cocoon forming", "cocoon breaking" and "butterfly changing"; on the other hand, vivid and vivid language is everywhere in each paragraph. For example, to describe the youth's autistic with "the heart without wind can't stir up the ripples" and "surrounded by myself, only blue melancholy accompanies me"; to reveal the extremely contradictory psychology with "I yearn for new life, but fear the sting of sunshine after breaking the cocoon"; to "light the lamp of love and hope again in my life, I bravely rush to the blue sky, in the flowers Fly over and enjoy the warmth of the sun "to render the joy of breaking through the closure and getting new life.

可能是因为考场特定的紧张氛围，本文也存在着明显的缺陷。全文“自闭”的痛苦表现得比较充分，而“战胜”的过程却过于简单，只用“青春，就是如此的神秘，它引领着人们走向成熟。强烈的新生欲望，使我破茧而出，走向光明”两句话一带而过。战胜自己，重在写战胜的过程，如果只是一语带过，则这种“胜利”就难有说服力，就不能让读者得到启迪。另处，文章在语言上也有一些值得推敲的地方。如“蓝色的蛹，束缚着青春”这个比喻中，“蛹”应该是“茧”之误（后文“为自己编织着蓝色的蛹”也是），而“蓝色”似应为“白色”；“无风吹过的心畔”中，“心畔”应为“心湖”；“惟独自己孤芳自赏”一句重复过多，应改为“惟有孤芳自赏”。

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