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日历上的点滴幸福

日历还将一页页翻过，幸福也将一次又一次的传递。翻开新的一页，你又会发现这一页将会记载着母亲为你精心打造的幸福……

The calendar will also turn over one page, and happiness will be delivered again and again. Turn to a new page, and you will find that this page will record the happiness that your mother has meticulously built for you

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记叙文最忌平铺直叙，文章却巧妙构思：选取生活中三个典型事件（母亲送我去看病，在我学习松懈时鼓励我，傍晚在家对我的守候之爱）提炼为几个精致的细节（推自行车的粗重喘气声，对我鼓励的眼神和微笑、清风似的话语，屋顶上的袅袅炊烟）以细腻的描写生动凸现出来，母亲与我的心灵交流、给我的幸福传递跃然纸上；又用散文笔法，以“翻到日历的×××页，那上面记载着……”的领起句串联起来，并首尾呼应点题，形散而神不散。

The narrative is the most taboo to be straightforward, but the article is ingenious: select three typical events in life (my mother sent me to see a doctor, encouraged me when I was slack in my study, and my waiting love at home in the evening) and refine them into several delicate details (heavy breathing of pushing a bicycle, encouraging eyes and smiles, wind like words, and smoke curling on the roof) to describe them in detail Vividly, my mother's communication with my heart and happiness transfer to me jumped to the surface of the paper. In prose, I turned to page XX of the calendar, which recorded The leading sentences are connected in series, and the head and the tail correspond to the point. The form is scattered but the spirit is not scattered.