只要我们人人都提上装满爱和承诺的满篮春光去看地球妈妈,我们的地球妈妈必将生机昂然,我们明天就将更加美好。
As long as all of us put up a basket full of love and commitment to see the earth mother, our earth mother will be alive, and we will be better tomorrow.
[简评]本文是安徽高考作文的标杆文,专家评分58分。评分依据如下:
[brief comment] this article is the benchmark text of Anhui college entrance examination composition, with experts scoring 58 points. The scoring basis is as follows:
一.立意新颖。文章作者别出心裁,跳出常人思维的模式,从环保的角度去着笔,并虚化了标题中妈妈为地球妈妈。角度独特,立意新颖。
1、 Original idea. The author of this article is out of his mind, jumping out of the mode of ordinary people's thinking, writing from the perspective of environmental protection, and falsely changing the mother of the earth in the title. The angle is unique and the idea is novel.
二.主题明确。文章紧扣标题的重点词语:春光,妈妈。着力表达了妈妈的大度和奉献以及妈妈的伤心和无奈。也表达了儿子对妈妈的理解和感恩。为让地球妈妈春光无限。让地球母妈妈变得更好,不再受污染遭破坏。儿子们作出自己的努力。主题明了。
2、 The theme is clear. The key words of the title: Chunguang, mom. It focuses on the expression of her generosity and dedication as well as her sadness and helplessness. He also expressed his son's understanding and gratitude to his mother. In order to let the earth mother spring unlimited. Let mother earth become better, no longer be damaged by pollution. The sons made their own efforts. The theme is clear.
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