Let us know how to transpose and make life play a happy note.
让我们善于换位,使人生充满美丽画卷。
Let's be good at transposition and make life full of beautiful pictures.
让我们乐于换位,使人生价值得以彰显。
Let's be happy to change places, so that the value of life can be demonstrated.
【失分警示】?
[loss of points warning]?
如果抛开考题,单独地来看这篇文章,虽算不上精美,但也无明显败笔。可出乎读者意料的是,立意的偏差,让文章落入了“失败”的误区。此教训不可谓不深刻啊!?
If you put aside the examination questions and look at this article alone, it is not exquisite, but it has not obviously failed. But to the readers' surprise, the deviation of intention makes the article fall into the error of "failure". This lesson is not so profound! ?
文章立意为“换位人生”,完全背离了诗句蕴涵的哲理,有另起炉灶之嫌。从开头所引的苏诗“横看成岭侧成峰,远近高低各不同”来看,也只能推出“要多角度观察”这一结论,而非“换位思考”的观点。正文部分作者试图通过举例来论证“要懂得换位思考”这一观点,但所举事例与论点并不吻合:第一个例子要谈的是“换角度思考的问题”,而非作者所言的“换位思考”;雷锋的例子严格说来论述的是“个人与集体”的关系,也非“换位思考”。由此,可判为偏离题意。评分:10分(内容)+15(表达)+0(发展等级)=25分。(罗小军)
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