懂得了自尊,学会了坚强,拥有了信念,活出能震撼世态常情的人生。
Know self-esteem, learn to be strong, have faith, live a life that can shake the world.
“好好”地活着,你相信我吗?
Do you believe me to live "well"?
【名师点评】
[comments on famous teachers]
本文在选材上很值得借鉴。汶川地震灾难之后写情感,多数会引人重新陷入还未摆脱哀伤的圈中,反而会使选材过于集中,而忽视文中其他亮色。但此文作者非常机智,既以“5·12”地震为题材,又选取其他题材,将二者紧密结合在一起,使文章既具时代特色又不至于过分集中到某个题材上,造成考场上选材的撞车。
This paper is worth learning in material selection. After the Wenchuan earthquake, writing emotions, most of them will lead people to fall back into the circle of sadness, but will make the selection too concentrated, and ignore other bright colors in the article. However, the author of this article is very witty, not only taking the "May 12" earthquake as the theme, but also selecting other themes, combining them closely, which makes the article not only have the characteristics of the times, but also not too much focus on a theme, resulting in the collision of materials in the examination room.
文章以排比段开头,以“5·12”地震为题材,将人之常情与“活着真好”连接起来,引出话题,又扣住了题目,给文章写作定了位,将抽象的题目具体化。主体部分,采用层层深入的方式揭示“活着真好”的内涵:先写非常时期悟出“活着”的生命意义,再写平常时期自己不能懂得“活着真好”这份人之常情的真正涵义,形成对比,揭示“活着真好”的涵义;在此基础上,作者进一步指出“活着”的信仰已不是满足肉体的衣食所需、物欲享受,而是战胜悲哀,走出落寂的挑战,上升到哲理、人生探求,使文章主题深刻、高远。结尾问中有答的余味又为文章增添了一笔精彩,把成熟之后的思考表现为将付诸行动的誓言,尤其是“好好地”寓意深刻。(李广元)
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