But in-depth analysis, we can see that the article has serious deficiencies. First of all, the author did not go deep into it well after he made his point. For example, the examinee listed the invasion of foreign bad culture and the atrophy of traditional excellent culture, but they still remained on the surface, lacking in-depth analysis. Second, punctuation cannot be used correctly. For example, "this morning glow comes from our admiration and love for Chinese culture, inheritance and development:", "in the sentence should be replaced by", "and": "should be replaced by". ". Thirdly, due to the lack of strict training, language is not standardized in some places. Such as "why? Is it the invasion of foreign bad culture? Or the lack of their own excellent traditional culture, leading to their loss of spiritual dependence? " There is a problem of mixed sentence patterns in this sentence. This is a question setting sentence, which starts with a question, and then uses two questions to form a choice complex sentence, which answers from two aspects: the invasion of foreign bad culture and the lack of their own excellent traditional culture. Therefore, deleting "causes them to lose their spiritual dependence", and the sentences appear more concise and clear. Another example is the ending "in this way, the confused seed will also bloom and bloom; in this way, the confused white cloud will also dye all over the body, golden". Obviously, the author wants to make antithetical sentences, but fails to do so. In fact, it can be changed to "just like this, the confused seeds will bloom and bloom; just like this, the confused white clouds will also be dyed with golden glow". Do you think it's very beautiful? Fourth, the number of words does not meet the requirements, the full text including punctuation only 793 words. In fact, the author only needs to say one more sentence, and will not make such a negligent mistake. (Tang Zheng)
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