This paper begins with an explanation of the meaning of "living in nature" and points out the central point of view. The main part takes guotuotuo tree planting and the allusion "Handan learning step" in the text "guotuotuo biography of tree planting" as an example to clarify the truth that people should live and grow naturally, and write their own wishes according to the reality. At the end of the article, I make clear my point of view again and give a call. The article has clear thinking and complete structure.
但遗憾的是,第一个事例叙述的角度不是很恰当,从而影响了文章的表达效果,这个事例应该从树的角度来叙述,且只是叙述事例,缺乏对事例必要的分析,使事例与观点之间缺乏逻辑联系,有点割裂;文章是一篇议论文,但文体特征不明显,段落之间也缺乏必要的过渡,只是事例的简单堆砌。此外,文章的语言还欠火候,还有点稚嫩,虽然流畅但缺乏美感,生动性不足。(罗胤)
Unfortunately, the angle of the first case is not very appropriate, which affects the expression effect of the article. This case should be narrated from the perspective of tree, and only narrates the case. The lack of necessary analysis of the case makes the case lack of logical connection with the point of view, which is a bit separated. The article is a argumentative paper, but the stylistic features are not obvious, and the paragraphs are also lack of necessity The transition is just a simple pile of examples. In addition, the language of the article is still immature and a little immature. Although it is fluent, it lacks beauty and vividness. (Luo Yin)
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