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蚌育珍珠是许多人都知道的故事，它包含着一个经历艰辛困苦获得成功的道理，这个事例能很好地契合“雨燕减肥”这一话题的深刻寓意。文章脉络清晰，从蚌育珍珠写起，中间部分采取排比式段落点明标题中的“它”所指的内容，接着将“我”置于其中，以隐喻的写法，把“我”突破困扰找到前进方向的心灵历程展现出来，最后一段，呼应文题，点明主旨。全文立意高，文采足，被评为满分。

Many people know the story of pearl growing in clam, which contains a truth of success through hardship. This case can well fit the profound meaning of the topic of "swallow lose weight". The article has a clear context. From the beginning, the middle part of the article uses a parallel paragraph to point out the content of "it" in the title, then puts "I" in it, and shows the spiritual process of "I" breaking through the puzzle and finding the way to go. The last paragraph, echoing the topic, points out the main idea. The full text is of high intention and full literary style, and is rated as full score.

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