舞动科技与知识的羽翼齐飞_高中英语作文

舞动科技与知识的羽翼齐飞

[warning of misunderstanding] this paper is closely related to the material, and determines the idea by the meaning of the material. The idea of "dancing technology and knowledge fly together" is profound, with a rigorous structure and an inspiring language. So, in the initial evaluation, we gave 45 points. However, after careful analysis, there are many problems in this paper, which are mainly manifested in two aspects: first, the center of argument is not concentrated. For example, in the elaboration of knowledge and technology, a large number of investigations, I think it is unnecessary, can be presented in the form of examples, so as to make the structure of the article more compact, more concentrated argument. Second, the basic language skills are not solid, the sick sentences and wrong words affect the overall evaluation of the paper. How to upgrade this second class article? The author believes that:

1。夯实基础。首先，夯实字词句基础，在行文的时候，尽量避免甚至杜绝错别字和病句的产生。其次，夯实语言表达的基础。对同一事物，要善于运用不同的语言来表达，使之富于变化。

1. Consolidate the foundation. First of all, lay a solid foundation for words and sentences. When writing, try to avoid or even put an end to the generation of wrong words and sentences. Secondly, lay a solid foundation for language expression. We should be good at using different languages to express the same thing and make it rich in variety.