While much has been recorded of young people imitating media violence, little has been directed to the influence of sad violence on those who are able to differentiate the imaginary situations in movies and on television from reality. If one were to find no similar relationship it could be immediately surmised that the most direct solution is increased supervision of young people, and not themodification of media content. The degree to which people are influenced by what they see in the media depends directly on how responsibly they are educated about the relationship of fiction and reality.

　　点评:1+2模式.请注意,此文每段的句数都比较少,这是因为作者的语言功底比较强,都是长句,词数已达到要求,因此没有进一步展开,对于一般的同学来说,支持句至少写4句!

　　Watching comedies does not transform one into a comedian, and watching violent movies does not directly make one violent. Rather than taking crude half measures to repair complex social problems, more focus must be placed on the nature of interpersonal relationships, social responsibility and personal accountability.

　　点评:最后一段总结了主体段所体现的辩证观.注意对比此文的首段和尾段,明显的最后段是对第一段最后一句话的扩充展开,做到了首尾呼应!!!

　　总评:

　　此文属于4段式写法,也是一种比较实用的作文段落安排

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