结构分析:1+2模式,第1句是主题句。结构上就不多说了,因为没有什么问题。
语言方面:乍看之下没有什么明显的语法错误,但是仔细一分析,很多表达都可以改进一下,这就可能是更高一个档次所以考虑的问题了!虽然看上去改了很多,但是6分依然可以保证,关键就是看是7分还是8分。但是,看了这一段,看来8分是不太可能了,呵呵。。。
On the other hand, overpopulation is also the cause of this problem. Especially in china(标点符号乱用,应该用逗号,然后小写!!!), although the growth of accommodation is rapid. It still can not meet the increasing needs of people(加个the可能更好些). Furthermore, with the burgeoning of some industrial cities. People, attractive to comparative advantages, such as education and job opportunities, have been swarming into these dreamland of fantasy ,which brings heavy burden to the limited housing resources.
语言分析:看正文段的语言水平一般就能看出作者真正的英语功底,看来这位老兄也就7分的命了,8分是肯定没有了,呵呵。。。
Finally, we can not deniable(低级错误,can后面能加形容词?!) the fact that government lack(单数名词怎么可以加动词原形呢?!) social awareness and consciousness of equilibrium between economic construction and utilization of land. the government of city without the planning of sustainable development for land(此句似乎没有谓语动词!!!). The policies should be made to allow more skyscrapers to be built
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