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雅思写作范文考官点评及修改意见

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　　Nowadays,.

　　The technology has changed the peoples interaction in very enhanced manner. Earlier people usedto wait and try to find easy waysto contact their friends or relatives leaving far. In the past, there was no technology to contact others or to establish any communication between two people. Andthe drawback ofthe past communication systems was that they were too slow and were time-consuming , including the telegrams, the letter etc. Not only that,people used to be afraid to write their personal feedbacks or things to their loved ones because of information security of communication.

　　However，now the things have changed around.People in a long distance contact their lovesd one in ways, which improvethe interaction level between two persons. Quality of the interaction between people and peoplehas been improvedbecause they are equipped with high-techdevices which enhances their communication. There are manymediummediaavailable such as internet, called cards etc.So the technology has provided better mobility , which help people to talk or keep in touch with each other at any time anywhere in the world.