雅思写作范文赏析与评改：跨国公司_雅思英语写作

雅思写作范文赏析与评改：跨国公司

　　4.最后一句的of course用在这里根据上下文语气来看不太合适，应改为to be sure。Suffer from the damage用在这里也不够准确, 而且读者并不清楚为什么会遭受损失，需要增添细节以说明。

　　第三段：

　　1.the view taken by other people 不如改为others hold the view，这样在修辞上和第二段的开始相对应。另外，该句中的In terms of 引导的短语一般不用作表语。

　　2.It is true that the imports have been sold everywhere in my country.句中的意思不完整，in my country显得累赘。To illustrate 一般不独立使用。In the meanwhile = in the mean time 意思是在此期间，用在这里不合乎逻辑。此句在这里也显得多余，应删除。而且这个句子的意思不够清晰。

　　3.exotic 用于指公司不符合英语惯用。应改为：foreign companies/businesses.

　　4.最后一段应该进一步充实。

　　Revised draft by Wang Rutao

　　There is no doubt that international cooperation, from private enterprises to governments, has become increasingly prevalent in recent years. It is not only conducive to economic globalization, but beneficial for almost every country as well.

　　Some people claim that international cooperation is good for environmental protection. They are well aware that every country has its unique way of protecting environment. For example, the Dutch do well in disposing of wastes. If their advanced technology can be introduced into the developing countries that can hardly invent it, not only some countries or groups but also perhaps all of the people living on earth will benefit a lot. To be sure, the countries that have invented these technologies may have to suffer economic losses on a certain level unless their intellectual property rights are protected by the governments.