Many tourists are living garbage just anywhere. Some of them want an exotic souvenir so they pay for illegal things like dead or live animals or some sculpture.
To sum up I think international traveling is a good thing but people must realise that there is something else besides them. They need to know that flora and fauna needs to be protected. People have to enjoy their holidays but alsow protect environment.
Below is an analysis of this essay.
Task Response.
The essay question has been copied and used as the introduction . Once these 34 words are taken off the word count, the response is underlength at 194 words and so loses marks. Nevertheless, the topic is addressed and a relevant position is expressed, although there are patches - as in the third paragraph - where the development is unclear. Other ideas are more relevant but are sometimes insufficiently developed.
Coherence and Cohesion.
The candidates ideas are clearly organised, and there is an overall progression within the response. There is some effective use of a range of cohesive devices . Referencing is also sometimes used effectively . However, there is also some mechanical over-use of linkers in places . As well, paragraphs are sometimes rather too short and inappropriate.
Lexical Resource.
A range of vocabulary is attempted, and this is adequate for a good response to the task. However, control of the vocabulary is weak, and there are frequent spelling errors which can cause some difficulties for the reader . This lowers the mark.
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