有一类常见的大作文是双边议论型的,即有人认为A好,有人认为B好,要求discuss两方面的优缺点。这种文章不可避免要涉及到A和B的比较,所以比较时经常出现这样的句式:
Driving a private car is more comfortable than taking a bus, but taking a bus is far more economical than the fuel cost.
这组并列句中前面一句是以开私家车作为句子开始的,而but后的一句是以坐公交车为出发点的。如果说并列句中前后两部分主语不同是可以的,但问题是第一句中比较的对象是坐公交车,是宾语,而第二句中又变成了主语,所以就造成主语频繁转换的问题,令读者眩晕。其实修改也很简单,只要把第一句的主语和宾语互换位置,然后把more改成less即可,这样前后一气呵成,后面的一句主语也可以用代词替代,更为简洁。
第二个连贯方面常见的问题是话题发生游移的问题,一般我们称为跑题。如在一篇阐述城市居住环境的议论文中,一位学生这样写:
People living in large cities often suffer from too much pressure. They cant go to sleep easily. An example is my parents who work hard everyday so that they seldom have time to rest. After one year, my moms hair turned white. If we work all day without rest, nobody will go on. A day has 24 hours. 8 hours is for work, 8 is for rest and the other 8 is for play.
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