英文：外教谈雅思作文如何获得高分_雅思英语经验技巧

英文：外教谈雅思作文如何获得高分

　　The body paragraphs should also follow the line of the stated opinion. The following paragraph does the following NOT support a clear position。

　　In modern society many people feel stress from their work so they look for new and exciting ways to relieve their work pressure. One effective way to do this is to partake in extreme sports such as surfing, skiing or parachute jumping. However these sports often result in injury or death to the individual and this is not good for society。

　　A much better paragraph would be:

　　It is undeniable that dangerous or extreme sports can cause injury or even to death to individuals , however it must be said that this fact alone does not warrant a ban on such activities. On the contrary, rather than banning these sports governments should ensure that companies who provide facilities for dangerous sports meet the required legal safety standards。

　　This paragraph clearly states the opinion of the writer. It does not simply touch on the topic of the question。

　　The essay could continue with another paragraph which clearly develops the pre-stated opinion。

　　Furthermore it is important to stress that if governments attempt to ban extreme sports, many people would view this as an infringement on the rights of an individual. In fact it would fair to maintain that if extreme sports were banned, then why not ban any activity which could be interpreted as harmful such as smoking, drinking or even eating junk food。