例如:In the fall, not only did the cows have to be milked, but also the hay was mowed and stacked by my grandfathers family。
本句不够简洁的原因是本句的重心应该是忙碌的家庭-my grandfathers family,而使用了被动语态後,彷佛重心变成了cows和hay。下面的表达方式是主动语态,相对来说更简洁一些:
In the fall, my grandfathers family not only milked the cow but also mowed and stacked the hay。
5.用更为精确的一个动词来代替动词短语,
例如:My grandfather didnt have time to stand around doing nothing with his school friends。
Stand around doing nothing其实可以用一个动词来表达,即loiter:
My grandfather didnt have time to loiter with his school friends。
6.有时两句话的信息经过组合完全可以用一句话来简练地表达
例如:Profits from the farm were not large. Sometimes they were too small to meet the expenses of running a farm. They were not sufficient to pay for a university degree。
两句话的信息可以合并为下面这句更为简洁的句子:
Profits from the farm were sometimes too small to meet operational expenses, let alone pay for a university degree。
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