点评:这个题难写之处不仅在于自己的做法,还在于自己的想法。开头务必提出为什么要关爱老人。然后中间段落说怎么关爱。最后总结。
注意:平时多积累同义表达,比如照顾:look after, take care of,care for
二.谈自己做法:
Im not living with my grandparents, but I visit them once a week if possible. I often help them with some housework. Besides, I call to say hello to them when I have time. They are always happy to hear my voice. I think what they do need is our love.
精彩句式和词组: .. if possible. what they do need is our love.
点评:这一段孩子们写的要比范文更好!注意句式的衔接,注意夹叙夹议。
范文提升:My grandparents live far away from our house,but I visit them once a week if possible, which always makes them very happy. When I get there, I will help them with some housework and chat with them to add some pleasure to their life.
Every time when I accompany them or just call them, they feel excited just like children. Now I realize what they do need is our love and care.
三. 谈感想和建议:
I hope everyone can do something for the old. Its our duty to make sure they live happily.
精彩句型: Its our duty to make sure they live happily.
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