whitepigeonoverhishead.Thebackgroundwasfullofwoundedsoldersandguns.Thus,
thislovelywhitepigeonwascontrastiveto
thisicedbackgroundandgavepeopleadeepconsideration.Suddenly,athoughtcomesintomymind:Whytherehavebeensomanywarsintheworldjustforsomeone'sowninterest?Whycan'tpeoplelivelikeasmallpigeonwithfreedom?Ihopetherewillnotbewars,FOREVER!教师评析:应该说,要把这篇看图作文写好是有相当难度的,但考生以非常流畅的笔调从鸽子联想到自由与和平,再联想到发生在伊拉克的战争。文风成熟老练,这在初中生的作文中是难能可贵的。
教师拟评分:10分[例6]审题:该图要求考生先看懂漫画,对它进行清晰的描述,同时根据其隐藏的寓意提出自己的观点,如在此图中应关注树木被砍伐而提出环保的重要性。
学生作文:Seeingthispicture,weknowthat
thesetreeshavebeencutdown.Butasaverylittlebabyinthepicture,hemustbepuzzled.Hewillask:Whatarethese?Arethesetrees?Ofcourse,inourimagination,
treesmustbetall,strongandgreenenough.Actually,hisquestionshowshumansaproblemthatisworththinkingabout.Thecoveringrateoftheforestintheworldhaskeptdecreasingtheseyearsanditcausedalotofproblemsonenvironment.Asweallknow,treesareveryimportantinourlife.Theycanmaketheairfresher,reducenaturaldisastersandsoon.SoIappeal:Don'tcutdowntrees.Let'smakeourearthgreenerforourlatergeneration.Don'tletthechildrenthinktreesareonlyroots!
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