However, Watching TV also has some disadvantages. Watching TV too more is bad for our eyes and we will have less time learning the subjects at school. (Watching TV over a long time is harmful for our eyes, and makes us have less time to learn the subjects well at school.)
(第五段:总结。)
So its important to have a rational plan for watching TV. (很好!我要再改就要犯罪了!注意:独立成段。)
晓伟点评:
小牛同学:
这篇作文写超级棒,很像五段式的托福综合写作,中考的时候要谨慎使用,因为就像玩双截棍一样,你在现在还不能很好的控制它,所以要小心。
好久没看到这样的作文了,我很高兴。
敬礼
你的刘晓伟老师
查看原帖:http://bbs.eduu.com/thread-155729-1-2.html
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