第一段没有描述图画是大忌。可以写成：

　　As is shown in the picture, a pair of compasses are proud of drawing a circle with great ease, while a pencil are burdened with drawing a line. We can figure out something meaningful from the picture.

　　In our life, some people work very hard. Ang they often feel very tired. Because they often dont have enough experlence. But they often can be have some sudden harvest. So they usually will success, if they do something.

　　And another people have enough experlence. So they can do something very fast and well. But they usually cant have some harvest on work. S they cant honour all of life.

　　第二段需要指出问题的所在。首先要引用圆规 和pencil 说明他们各自的特点和各自看待对方的态度。然后再升华到人的角度来说明，做人应该怎么怎么样。可以写成：

　　To begin with, difference can be seen clearly between the compasses and the pencil due to their different application. The compasses have every reason to feel superior in drawing a circle because they are designed to do so. But if the compasses are used to draw a line, the pencil may have the same feeling. As a result, a conclusion can be easily drawn: both of them have their own advantages.

　　So dont lose youself in your life.

　　第三段要总结问题，必须是从圆规 和pencil的问题中的抽象出来，总结出来一个做人做事的普遍规律。可以写成：

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