北京市08年高考英语开放式作文点评和习作修改_高考作文

北京市08年高考英语开放式作文点评和习作修改

　　(2) 如何看待对方各自的特点

　　3. 总结问题：升华主题

　　You are somebody if you can innovative, but if you can't you are nobody.

　　第一段没有描述图画是大忌。可以写成：

　　As is shown in the picture, a pair of compasses are proud of drawing a circle with great ease, while a pencil are burdened with drawing a line. We can figure out something meaningful from the picture.

　　In our life, some people work very hard. Ang they often feel very tired. Because they often don't have enough experlence. But they often can be have some sudden harvest. So they usually will success, if they do something.

　　 And another people have enough experlence. So they can do something very fast and well. But they usually can't have some harvest on work. S they can't honour all of life.

　　第二段需要指出问题的所在。首先要引用圆规(compasses) 和pencil 说明他们各自的特点和各自看待对方的态度。然后再升华到人的角度来说明，做人应该怎么怎么样。可以写成：

　　To begin with, difference can be seen clearly between the compasses and the pencil due to their different application. The compasses have every reason to feel superior in drawing a circle because they are designed to do so. But if the compasses are used to draw a line, the pencil may have the same feeling. As a result, a conclusion can be easily drawn: both of them have their own advantages.