Another persuasive example is Benjamin Franklin, one of the vital composers of the Declaration of Independence. He was a colonist and owned many slavers. He earned money from them and traded them. After a long time, he realized the terrifying treatment that slavers experienced---they were beaten, they were separate from families, they were forced to toil laboriously. Slavers were suffered . Franklin wanted to help slavers. He established schools for slavers to achieve education and began to help them out of the terrible condition. He was the avant-garde who firstly realized the freedom of everyone. His change influenced the whole United States immediately. During the bloody Civil War, slavers were totally released. It was Benjamin Franklin who adapted to the modern society which emphasized the freedom of each person.
The two examples above demonstrate that people should adapt to their surroundings rather than refusing to change. On no account can we ignore the importance of change. Certain single change may urge the development of the society and make such great contribution.
总体来说,个人觉得ETS评分比较松的,Fayer同学犯了不少她平时不会犯得错误,根本就没有写出她的最好水平。但是鉴于考场环境和心理因素,这篇文章也可以了,毕竟ETS 给了11分,还是值得肯定的。个人觉得主要是她的两个例子举得比较好,而且都解释到位了。希望下次Fayer更细心一点,冲击一下12分。
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