Bright, very bright, were the stars over the wild, dark Yenan hills.

--Anna Louise Strong

动词和主动语态：在描写动作时，用动词比用表示动作的名词要好些，因为动词比名词更为生动有力。比较：

At the sight of the disorderly crowed, he was aware that something bad would be possible.

The moment he saw the disorderly crowed, he knew that something bad would happen.

第二句中的三个动词(saw，knew，happen)给人一种紧急的感觉，而第一句则缺少这种气氛。

从属：就是把次要的意思放在句子从属的成分里，从而突出主要意思。下面一句话包含两个意思：

The professor walked into the classroom and he carried a bag of books with him.

这句的并列结构表示这两个意思同等重要。事实上前一个应该是主要意思，后一个则应该是从属的：

The professor walked into the classroom, carrying a bag of books with him.

The professor walked into the classroom with a bag of books under his arm.

The professor walked into the classroom, a bag of books under his arm.

请改写下列各句，使重点得到强调：

1.She often helps many comrades in her class to improve their pronunciation.

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